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Challenge of the Week CCXXXIII
Write a short poem about waking up in drunken regret. On this one, winner is decided by likes. Make it brutal. 25 big ones on the line. Go.
Ended August 4, 2023 • 46 Entries • Created by Prose
Challenge
Challenge of the Week CCXXXIII
Write a short poem about waking up in drunken regret. On this one, winner is decided by likes. Make it brutal. 25 big ones on the line. Go.
Broken
A shot of whiskey,
Maybe two.
Hours of Misery and Waiting.
Hard oak wood
A breath of chance.
Soul is dying
Losing time,
Take me away.
EmmaMith
Thanks for the prompt! @Prose
Prose
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MClarice
----Though brief, yet profoundly intense poem, rich in imagery and emotion, encapsulates a deep sense of despair, a yearning for an escape, and the pain of stagnation.
---There's an evident progression from seeking solace (whiskey) to feeling trapped (hard oak wood) to an ultimate plea for release (take me away).
----Your piece is a poignant snapshot of a moment in someone's life, a deep dive into a particular feeling of desolation. Its strength lies in its simplicity and the powerful emotions it evokes. Through sparse yet impactful lines, it paints a picture of a soul in torment, seeking relief from the crushing weight of despair. It's a haunting, evocative piece that resonates deeply with anyone who has ever felt trapped or desolate.
EmmaMith
thank you @MClarice <3