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Submit anything to receive some constructive criticism.
I think learning and growing from our work is really important as a writer, so I invite everyone to come here and submit something they want feedback on. I will make sure to give as much feedback as I can myself, but I hope other writers do so as well. After posting try reading someone else's work and giving them feedback. Let them know what you like, but also let them know what you think they can do to make their piece even better. After all, we can't learn from just praise. I'll post some of my work for feedback as well.

2 Poems I Want Feedback On

Think Before I Die

Here’s a crazy idea

What if I stop drowning

In shallow water,

and lift my head up to find air?

I could brace myself

For the fall,

Instead of diving face first

Into it all.

I could put a jacket on

Before I freeze to death.

Clear the frost off my nose,

And control my breath.

I should take hold of the wheel

And keep my eyes on the road

Before that’s not an option anymore.

I can put pressure on the wound.

I can take the right amount of pills.

I can hydrate before I run.

I can, on my worst days, have the will

To try again.

Here’s a crazy idea

What if I think before I die

And learn to adapt to life?

Nah, that’s too crazy...

Call Me Princess

Look through your window

And call me princess

See the primadonna

And assume that’s me.

Little do you know

You’ve taken opportune glances

At all the wrong times.

I am not the me you have inside your head.

Dripping Mascara

Spilled wine.

Pouty Lips.

You must think I’m a whiny bitch.

Listen up.

I might complain.

I might cry.

I might act like I’m larger than life.

So what?

Don’t assume that my loudest cries

Are my only thoughts.

For once look at what goes on

Behind my eyes.

You can call me princess

And that I am.

Open your window.

And find so much more.